FVL.17.Notes

I kei gudsange mi nipo dzoru nia rafa {lio/}sute denli
I don't see the need of lio here, but it certainly doesn't do any harm. I imagine APL was using it as a dimensioned unit, a period of three days, whereas te denli does not necessarily mean consecutive days, but I would have thought that covered by nia rafa. I guess I will leave it in, but leave this note as a commentary.

I le kicmu {/ga}genza snible fei.
Missing ga

I{/,}niba rodlu va le geshaa.

I la BeibiDjein {/ga}kentaa le mande je le geshaa tio, e nu djadou mei lepo ne hasnu beigru fa damkaa le geshaa, le monbia, ice miu kau nu berti {gei/bei}
Presumably a misprint, since A would be carried by the beigru, not the geshaa.

I lui la Mren, hue Dai, kraju le hedto, I tu langa nu tugle, {/inusoa}oa tu skitu la Minfiu.
A connector is necessary between the two linked sentences. In this instance, the first part implies the second, therefore inusoa is needed.

Dai helba mi lepo tovneagoi le hasno guo, e kocduo lemi barkuvlyjuo le nimskicei, {epa/efa}casle ce pucto ganli leu {hasno/hasnu}ne clina, lepo le grupa fa fasru nujunu godzi le janro fitrua.

I lo turka ga {varhansiu/vayhansiu}la Dumbi, e caslo jmitaa Dai.
As mentioned in the notes to Chapter 5, var is the affix of vatlu. Va must be linked with y

Hue Dai{,/}klimao
Must be commaless or have a terminal gu to be recognized as an entire free modifier.

I mi jugra le nimskicei, e {capmao/klomao}le menki.
I am going by APLs English, and the context to indicate he closed his eyes, rather than opening them

Ibuo lo nu cutse {/ je}Dai ga tradu, ice le ra hasnu ga kejkao setfa lehai fitpi, e tisra lo saldi troku.

Ti {cedzu lo/nenri le cedzu je ne}vreti ze troku tcali, ice ba kukra kroli cmavri, e katli {ra/ro} felcui.
Cedzu is not defined in a verbal manner, so I have made it "This is in the shade of.." I am assuming he meant 'many' rather than 'all'

I mei skalanga lio sate metro, e nu menki go nigro ce brili.
I kept APLs older form, instead of metro lio sate, because metro has not currently a place to indicate the dimension. However, I separated the number from the unit, which I anticipate will become mandatory.

I Dai korbetmao, e tifru mei{/,}ne sakra sorhedro.
Still the result of the obsolete dimensioned units where letters are concatenated to numbers.
This will be removed in the next version of LIP.

I Dai donsu ne{/,}tori sakra mei {/guu}, {epa/efa}ne{/,}teri.
Without the comma instead of a second and a third , it becomes twelfth, and thirteenth. To be
corrected by a stress rule. Without the guu, mei efa ne, teri becomes a part of the mei argument with the meaning He gave a second sugar to the (snake and a third)

I fei na zvodanri laldo, e io {skalaldo lio sunemanei/nirne lio sunema}
Getting rid of the older dimensioned unit method.

I mi djano, hue mi{{,/. I mi}driki la {Terkoi/Torkoi}Josmaos.
Otherwise we get "And I know remember Lieutenant Josmaos", with an "I said" free modifier between know and remember. Torkoi to be consistent with the earlier chapter.

I nia lepo mi nuo setfa le barkuvlyjuo {/guo}, la BeibiDjein {/ga}lortoa ri flora le rodlynea {gui/}, e setfa fei le kapma je la Minfiu.
The guo is needed where it is. I don't understand the gui, (a ji closure, which there is not) unless it was a misprint for guo, and, if so, is in the wrong place.